Monday, 19 September 2016

zombies

jack was going through the wood these zombies came for jack was the only one lifted so the zombies found jack and jack ran to the other side so he found a car and he ran over the zombie and jack found some food inside the car and jack went for a drive and the ignition was finished so jack had to bush the car to the gas station and when jack got there their was lots of zombies their so he ran inside the car and he drove down the wood aging and jack stayed their for long inside their was no zombies and he went all the way to the airport and he drove his on air plane and he was safe. 

4 comments:

  1. Lopi, I know you wrote them in your book - where are your full stops and punctuation?
    I LOVE the problem you have put into this story - actually, there are lots of little problem! When I read it makes me think 'oh whats going to happen' and I feel excited to keep reading. Well done Lopi! Your writing has improved sooo much in the past few weeks!

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  2. Talofa lava Lopi, I love your stroy about zombie. I really want to learn about zombies now. But the part that I liked the most was when you said that Jack ran over the zombies with a car. There is only one little problem Lopi, you us foregot to addt in your Capital letters and full stops. Do you wish to learn more about zombies Lopi? Well I do.

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  3. kia lopiseni i was reading through your writing and it was great but you are missing i was wondering if you can check it again thank you from losehina ptengland.school

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  4. Kia Ora Lopiseni I really enjoyed reading your story about zombies it was really interesting and really fun. If you could I would really like you to reply on this and have a lot of fun. I wonder what you would do if you were to be a zombie? From Hinerangi. Keep up the great work...

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